My Angel of night

Hi everyone. I am really excited to present this to you all, I have been working very hard on this short story, and have put a lot of my heart and soul into it. I know it is not perfect yet, it is still a rough draft, but I could not wait to publish it, lol. I have been writing a lot, practicing and honing my skills in preparation for the novel I dream of publishing one day. I have learned many things, recognized some weaknesses, advanced in my strengths, and am gaining a better understanding of my own unique language and voice through my writings. I am concentrating on scene descriptions and character building amongst other things, and am looking forward to developing an exchange of dialect and personality between the people I create in my fantasy worlds. And of course, creating conflict, climax and weaving it all together will be a challenge, but a satisfying experience. I am having so much fun, feeling like I am settling in and finding my voice and place in this world through my talents. There is so much to look forward to. This is my baby, and as young  as it is, I am still proud of it and am thankful for the opportunity to share it with you all now. The title may be changed in the future. Enjoy the read, and I welcome your comments and feedback. I will be working on the second part soon.And though this part does have extremely passionate and sensual tones, it is not explicit, as the continuing part will be. But I will be fair and give a warning with the next installment. Enjoy and have a good day…..

~ Celeste ~

I had a dream, a lovely dream…..

or was it? It still feels so real…..

A familiar time and place

of ancient memories past,

an exotic world teeming with life

with colors so vivid and bright.

The air all around was alive and inviting

infused with a power and magic that excited me.

I had a peculiar feeling that my presence was known here,

and I was greeted and welcomed in with comforting tones.

A silken gown graced the curves of my body

warm breezes flowing through it’s stream of milky white

that fell in a smooth line from my shoulders.

My skin glowed under a huge silver moon

set like a radiant jewel in a crown of night sky.

The illuminate shine brought to life

this extraordinary world around me,

animating the landscape with the multitude

of shadows that were cast on the ground.

As I took in the beauty of the scene

I grew increasingly aware of another presence.

I was not alone.

I felt a set of eyes boring into me

watching my every move from the shadows.

My heart quickened and my skin started to tingle

as I let the awareness settle into my bones.

I squinted my eyes and strained to see better

and made out the silhouette of what appeared

to be a man, arms crossed, standing beneath a tree

at the edge of the woodline, staring straight at me.

The instinct to panic was quickly overridden with calm,

as though something willed it to be so.

I stood so still, heart racing, as the man

began a slow stride to make his way to me.

Heady, I began to sway in place

growing intoxicated by his presence as he drew close.

Watching helplessly,  I noticed two large shadows

following closely behind the man.

It looked like…..Wings….

My god, this man, or whatever he was,

was sporting a set of beautiful goliath size wings,

wings that were black as night.

He stopped a few yards short of reaching me

and as he stood, I could see the heavy rise and fall

of his chest in the moonlight.

From this distance, I saw his eyes glowing

 a deep sapphire blue,

twin jewels set in his now obviously handsome, regal features.

His jaw was a straight shot of bone

and though his lips were pressed together

I could tell they were full and bore

the slightest hint of a smile….

a smile that no doubt was a result of his thoughts

and  a promise of things to come.

This man was colossal, and carved out like a god

that had been reverently chiseled in stone.

He was gorgeous, flawless, larger than life…..

and the aura emanating from him was potent

and screamed of power and authority….

And, heaven help me, it was focused solely on me.

Though as it were, through all this strength he possessed,

I sensed a heaviness of heart, his years

of existence weighed upon him with an almost crushing force.

Loneliness, hunger, and grief had accompanied

this glorious creature for too long

and something inside me was reaching out to comfort him

in his distress, to relieve his pain and remove his burden

far from him.

 I was suddenly craving this man

with a ferocious hunger, and was more

than anxious to have him nearer to me.

He drew his eyebrows together

as though he had heard my thoughts,

his eyes growing more intense

and filled with longing by the second.

” I have been waiting for you” he said suddenly

in a deep, penetrating voice that made my knees weak.

“For a very long time.”

The muscles in his arms rippled

as he clasped his hands behind his back

and took a step forward to close the distance between us.

My heart went into staccato mode

and it was getting harder to catch even breaths.

Anticipation and desire deliciously charged the air

with each painfully slow step he took towards me.

What was wrong with me?

I could not wait to have him in arms reach

and be swallowed up by his enormous body….

God, I was losing my mind….

It was hard to think with my hormones running amuck…..

Our eyes locked in place as he was so close now,

and I saw a shadow move across his face

when he started to speak.

‘For millenia I have combed the earth

in search of you. Always watching, always waiting,

praying that my dreams of you were real.”

This was said with so much emotion

it squeezed at my heart.

Finally, he stopped within inches of me

and I could feel the heat pouring from him in waves.

And too I realized anew and with great appreciation

the sheer size of him.

His shoulders so broad they blocked

out the view of the world behind him.

But that was OK, I had all but lost interest

in the beautiful surroundings.

I drew in a breath, taking in his wild, masculine scent.

Damn, he smelled so good.

And I had a vague thought that I would be finding

out if he tasted as good as he smelled.

His scent wound it’s way around my insides

and my instincts registered something

that my mind could not yet comprehend.

Parts of me that I did not know existed

were coming alive and singing a chorus for this, angel.

There was no doubt this man was an angel.

He was the most magnificent thing

I had ever laid my eyes on.

Realizing my eyes had wandered, tracing

a hot line around his body,

I raised my head to look at his face

and was greeted with a ravenous gaze

that was looking so intently down on me.

Yet his eyes were glistening with unshed tears

that broke my heart.

Through his countenance I could perceive

the storm of emotions that were raging

inside his heart and mind.

Relief turned to passion and disbelief to desire,

his need against his intellect,

and so on they raged.

But none was as overwhelming as the

complete state of euphoria he was in

just from my presence alone,

the fact that I was real and alive

was an enormous relief and miracle

to him, and that was obvious.

Goodness, to be so desired by such a one

as this man made my head giddy

and spin with elation.

I had never been so wanted and desired

in all my life, and had never desired anything

with such an intensity I could barely breathe.

And all this for a man I just met

but felt like I had known for an eternity, just the same.

It felt like I was finally home.

As if he heard me and wanted to show he felt the same

he raised his hand to touch my face

and the contact shot a jolt of pure lust

through the both of us that rocked our souls.

He ran his finger over the outline of my jawbone,

 slowly traced the elegant slope of my neck,

and made his way down to

tease the part of my oh so sensitive

breast that was exposed

over the top edge of my gown.

My breath caught and I let out a sigh

and his chest rumbled in a low moan.

From that moment on we were connected

body and soul

our hearts joining together and erupting

in a fervent dance of passion.

TO BE CONTINUED…………..

About celestealluvial

My blog, 'MORTAL HEARTS WITH IMMORTAL SOULS', is a place of fantasy, reality, spirituality and beauty. A place to unwind and find inspiration for the soul. It consists of my personal thoughts and experiences, poetry, prose, quotes, beautiful photos, uplifting music, words of encouragement, and undying love. I welcome respectful, open discussion, sincere opinions and feedback, and encourage any questions you may have personally or of that which pertains to the subject’s content. I recently began writing a paranormal romance story. It is my dream to become a published author and I have had an amazing experience on this new writing adventure. I live a quiet life, in the peace and tranquility of beautiful country surroundings. My husband and son are my life and my joy. I am your average person with a passion for reading and writing, and I love to sit and contemplate the mysteries of life and the experience of the human pilgrimage. This is a love story, the journey of our fragile, mortal bodies that have been endowed with the power of an immortal soul. I do hope you enjoy the content found in this blog. I pour out my heart and soul into each word and lovingly present it to the world, for better or for worse.

34 responses to “My Angel of night

  1. Beautifully written, vivid in detail, erotic, passionate and deeply spiritual in essence~
    I am completely turned On, body, mind and spirit~ I think I’ll just sit here and wait for the rest of the story~ Mmmmm~! :-) :-)

  2. Ahhhh Celeste, I think your husband is the most luckiest man on this planet. You have got a spark that just not create a magic in your personality or writing but it is well exposed to the readers too – hence it is too contagious; you keep on distributing your love with us. I am so loving this and THE WAY YOU CREATE THE MYSTERY; sometimes I hate you for that as it URGES me to sit and wait here until you publish the NEXT POST!!! :)
    Love ,
    -Naima.

  3. COULD I BE HAPPIER FOR YOU !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    HOLY CANOLY,,,,,,,
    You were right :)
    what beauty !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! x 100000000000000000000000000000000000000
    It’s Your world in here ——- YOUR VISION :) YOUR HEART :)
    GO FOR IT XOXOXO
    WOOOOOOOOHOOOOOOOOOOO :)
    BY YOUR SIDE :)
    a gazillion percent xoxoxoxoxoxoxo
    Huge hugs xoxoxoxoxoxoxo
    Cat

  4. Beautiful vision, and written to sweep us into a world of its own….of course I was swept!…Oh, I cannot wait to read the next! Love always, Linda

  5. Very compelling, like a book too good to put down, Celeste! Wonderful and looking forward to the continuation! xoxo

  6. Intriguing characters and beauty! Its taken a grand shape! Very ethereal ~love it! Keep it going! Hugs! Deborah

  7. Guess the beat will keep echoing till the completion..

  8. Stunning writing Celeste…Both romantic and spiritual beaming with passion …. fantastic :) ~ Much Love Robyn

  9. Celeste… this is magnificent… sensual… arousing… tempting… beautiful and enticing. I love to read these. You write so everything flows smoothly and intertwines perfectly together.
    The only part that seemed to be a “bump” to me, (just offering my view for feedback purposes) was this sentence: **Man he was colossal, and carved out like a god that had been reverently chiseled in stone.** This is a great, strong, descriptive sentence…starting it with “Man” seemed to throw the rhythm off for a slight second. Of course this is strictly my silly opinion. As I read it over again, I realize that this is probably a piece of your personality coming through too. So looking at it like that makes me want to take back my initial thought that it “bumped” right there to me. Am I making any sense whatsoever?? LOL.
    I am certainly impressed with your writing style and the depth in which you describe these two people. It is as though they are sharing warm molten gold… intertwined with one another in seduction. Your writing is exquisite my friend and I look forward to you publishing one day. This is certainly a gift you have and I would purchase a book based on a piece of this excerpt alone. AMAZING!!!
    Love to you dear Celeste… May your publishing dreams come true! I am a cheerleader for you!! ♥

  10. Thanks so much for the feedback! Yes, this is one of the sentences up for revision in the second draft…..everything you just described i went through in my own mind…..You are keenly observant and have a sharp eye too by the way…..
    I will probably change it, because without setting a plot with her own inner dialogue and personal thoughts, it is hard for the reader to know what her personality is, therefore they can only mesh her into the context I have given them to put her in… so you are right, and have convinced me to remove that one little word, as I suspected I might, at least until there is more of a story where we can see her personality….thank you my lady, your thoughts are always welcome and i do trust your judgements……
    xoxoxo

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  12. Celeste, this is beautiful, passionate writing with lovely descriptions and imagery – I love it!

    Because you asked for thoughts and suggestions, I do have some for you that I believe will help to ‘tighten’ your writing. One of these is to remove as many unnecessary and ‘dead words’ as possible (was, as, that, and, were, etc.) and replace them with more active words – sometimes it’s not necessary to replace them at all, as the sentence still makes sense without them; and probably sounds better as well. Reading aloud will really help you to see if your words and phrasing needs to be tweaked so that it flows well.

    The other comment I wanted to make is the line, “as he bellowed out a low moan of longing.” – “bellowed” and “low moan” are contradictory sounds; it should be one or the other; i.e., “he bellowed out his longing” – or “he let out a low moan of longing” … do you see the difference?

    I’m truly enjoying reading this, and am off to read part two … well done, my lovely friend! ~ Love and hugs, Julie xoxox

  13. An excellent flap of prostrate THOUGHTS! I’m really amazed as well as glad enough to read this SHORT lukewarm and notable brilliant piece from you. Thanks a lot for such a great share. :) :)
    Keep posting! Cheers.\m/ :)

  14. I’ll reserve total judgement until I read through part two and three.

    Know this, though. I love your writing. I found it very sensual, yes- I could feel the heat there as with any good romance story.

    I can agree with Bipolarmuse that there are parts that break rhythm slightly- like ‘Man he was colossal’. But that’s okay. It’s a fairly simple fix should you like to, and it’s wonderful writing all the same. In particular I enjoy the heat of the story that builds, and it has a dream-like quality to it that makes my mind swim.

    The details are wonderful– and there are an intoxicating number of details. It fits with this story quite well– initially I thought perhaps it wouldn’t, because generally an immense number of detailed words in a sentence causes disorientation. Since this story had that dream-feel to it, they served to overwhelm in a bit of a different way. I found it quite effective. <3

    Otherwise, yes. Avoid contradictory words where possible. And come back and edit it when you're comfortable with it! It's a great way to get practice in. All writers need practice, whether they're the best or the worst.

    Thank you for sharing! I was drawn to part one after catching sight of part three and part two (Geez I'm really terrible at reading things in order). I haven't read those yet, but I certainly mean to now.

    <3s,
    Eris

  15. Celeste ! Your pretty face has gone from my comments section ! It’s an emergency ! Hehehe. Hope you are good delightful poet. Lou

  16. OMG!!! OMG!! OOHHH MYY GOD!!!! I can not explain how happy i am that i found this.. i am starting from the first one until i reach number 9.. this is so beautiful, so romantic, so what i need right now!! amaaazzzzzzzzzing!! :-D

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